Draft 4 feedback

I have recently met with my teacher about my most up-to-date film draft, and I have been given a series of adjustments I need to make to improve my draft.

Since my last draft I have adjusted my footage to make the narrative flow more easily and showed more camera control by using a tripod to create a more stable shot.

However I still need to improve on my sound and making my film long enough to fill the needed 2 minutes, I also need to make my sound more professional by blending the seperate sections together.

Teacher feedback from my third draft

My third draft has been reviewed by my teacher, and I have been given some feedback and things that need to be improved:

• change shaky shot at 0:15 
• change font at beginning of the film as it is different from the font of the other texts
• cut shot of running with people, as it slows down the narrative of the film
• fit sound with visual more effectively make film more dramatic
• move fountain shot at 1:15 as it slows down narrative
• change titles at 1:06 and other ones that appear on black screen as they make the production look very low budget

Reflecting on my second draft

I have created a Prezi about the feedback I have received and what I will do to  improve my film.
https://prezi.com/svtuzy0jwi3q/draft-2-reflection/

Teacher feed back + re-scheduling

Earlier this week I gathered a group of students together to ask them what they thought about the draft of my production, after showing them the film, I asked them to write down things they liked about the film, things they thought could be improved and how I could improve them. As you can see below I have compiled a table of their thoughts and have used their feedback to make another schedule for the next few weeks.

I have also received feedback about my film from my teacher which I will also take into consideration when adjusting my film, the elements of my film i need to change are:

• the rain on the lens during an establishing shot
• a sudden switch in music at 0:30
• the titles 'writer' 'kevin' are not conventional 
• back to back b-roll pans of scenery take away from pace of narrative  
• sequencing of keyboard needs to be during/ after dialogue