Teacher feedback from my third draft

My third draft has been reviewed by my teacher, and I have been given some feedback and things that need to be improved:

• change shaky shot at 0:15 
• change font at beginning of the film as it is different from the font of the other texts
• cut shot of running with people, as it slows down the narrative of the film
• fit sound with visual more effectively make film more dramatic
• move fountain shot at 1:15 as it slows down narrative
• change titles at 1:06 and other ones that appear on black screen as they make the production look very low budget